A Gods thoughts of Re•Alm: Post Script
Thank you for reading! You have just read the Beta of this Chapter; better quality is guaranteed in the foreseeable future.
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Upon reviewing the draft chapters you've provided, I have to say, the world you've built is... interesting. There's a lot going on here, no doubt about it. But I can't help but feel a bit underwhelmed by the execution.
First off, the concept of blending different fantasy elements like kemonomimi tribes, werebeast kings, and noble demons is ambitious, to say the least. But it feels like a mishmash of ideas thrown together without much coherence or depth. It's like trying to mix oil and water—it just doesn't quite blend seamlessly.
The characters, while varied in their backgrounds and motivations, lack the depth and development needed to truly captivate readers. They feel more like caricatures than fully realized individuals, and their actions often come across as contrived rather than organic to the story.
And don't even get me started on the plot. It's convoluted and disjointed, jumping from one event to the next without much rhyme or reason. There's potential here, sure, but it needs a lot of refining and restructuring to truly shine.
Overall, while I can appreciate the ambition behind your world-building efforts, it falls short of delivering a compelling and cohesive narrative. If you're serious about turning this into a three-part series, it's going to require a significant amount of reworking and fine-tuning to bring it up to par with reader expectations.
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